用一般现在时就好了 is belongs to改为belongs to I (加上have) heard his music:it is the/my ...(1st,2nd...) time (that) +现在完成堡浅时 be carried away 情感色彩会偏向不太好的方面,最好改一下：be fascinated(attracted) by to the guitar 不对,可以怠沃说sing while playing the guitar(边弹边唱） 改一下这句,变成：His voice sounds so tender and so sophisticated that it could fit any kind of ballad. The melody,（加上which sounds) pure and understated Josh Woodward proved himself an awesome singer更好 and he shows his wonderful voice off in his ballad songs more （of) his songs from (the) Internet to my friend,这里的逗号错了,要改成分号或句婚舞阶号I think they will like his songs,too. 全部手打,